Friday, June 13, 2014

Super Ultimate Cursed Computer! (Summer Writing)

Summer story written by Evan
My third graders are choosing to write stories in their Google Drives! Next, they share the Google Doc with me and leave a Google Doc comment asking to be published. I love having a connected learning community!  

The Super Ultimate Cursed Computer! 
By Evan

It was the last day of school at the end of the day for Mrs. Yollis’ class and she was showing the class on twitter about Mr. JR, but suddenly the computer went crazy.

“What is going on with the computer? I must call Mr. JR.” said Mrs. Yollis. Then the Panda started to say,

“Hello class, I’m your animal Panda,” said Panda. The class began to scream!

“Ahhhhh, Panda spoke!” said the class.

“Ok everybody, we must go outside and run to the library. Run!” said Mrs. Yollis. Mrs. Yollis’ class started to run out of the room and headed to the library, but as Mrs. Yollis was about to exit the classroom, she saw twenty-eight desks floating in the air and they
were on top of each other.

Illustration by Mrs. Yollis

“Oh my, I need to get out of here. The computer has taken over the class!” said Mrs. Yollis. Mrs. Yollis slammed the door and came outside.

“Students, I saw the desks floating in the air!” shouted Mrs. Yollis. Inside of the classroom the other desks started to float in the air too.

“Class you should look behind you,” said Evan

“And why?” asked Mrs. Yollis.

“The computer has grown larger,” said Evan. Mrs. Yollis turned around and saw the massive computer.

“It’s huge, like three giants!” said Mrs. Yollis. Samantha saw three dogs named Buck, Rocky, and Tanner. They were wearing ninja suits.

“Mrs. Yollis, there is Buck, Rocky, and some other dog,” said Samantha.

“That is my mom’s old dog, Tanner,” answered Evan. The three dogs came into a group and faced the evil curse computer. Buck did a huge kick and broke the body. Then Rockey did a big paw punch to the desktops. Finally Tanner broke the screen. Mrs. Yollis’ class was saved by these three dogs.  

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