Thursday, June 7, 2012

Bad News Bev!


Mrs. Yollis' class loves reading and writing. This year, the class read Dogzilla, by Dav Pilkey. They enjoyed the story so much, it inspired them to try and write a monster story of their own! The main characters are our two class mascots, Panda and Beverly!




After much writing, revision, and recording, Mrs. Yollis' students are proud to premiere their diabolical drama about a boisterous bear who terrorizes their classroom.

 Enjoy!

Bad News Bev!






Thank you @cybraryman1 for your wonderful tips about planning and writing a story! 


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What do you think of our story?

What elements did you enjoy the most?

What was the hardest part about writing and creating this story?

17 comments:

  1. Wow! What a wonderful collaborative story! I loved to hear everyone's voices. You all did a great job! I would love to share this with my 3rd graders. Your message of writing a quality comment is very important. Thanks for sharing!
    :) Mrs. Duray
    3rd Grade Teacher - Colorado

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    1. @ Mrs. Duray,

      Thanks so much for your quality comment! This project was a lot of work, but so much fun too. Everyone enjoyed recording themselves and working on fluency!

      I hope your third graders enjoy it! We only have 2 and a half more days of school!

      :-)
      Mrs. Y♥llis

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  2. Dear Mrs. Yollis and class,

    I really enjoyed making Bad News Bev. I think our story is the best story ever! My favorite part was when Super Panda (Matthew) said, "Beverly, I am your father". The hardest part of creating the story for me was speaking at the right time. The video turned out great, and I can't wait for my dad to see it.

    Your classmate,
    Maya

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    1. @ Maya,

      Thanks so much for a bear-y good comment! You're no Bad Bev!

      I loved that little twist too! Not only was it a clever idea from Matthew, but he delivered the line beautifully!

      Let us know what your dad thinks of our video! Maybe he'd like to leave a quality comment!

      Your teacher,
      Mrs. Y♥llis

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  3. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

    I can't believe we came up with such a great story within two days! I found the story humorous, interesting, and hopefully inspiring to other bloggers. Panda's strange voice, the descriptive writing, and the connection to Dogzilla made for a terrific story.

    My favorite part of the story is when Panda flew in and said, "Beverly stop your madness." Another line of Panda's I got a kick out of was, "Beverly I am your father", that cracked me up.

    In my opinion the hardest part of creating the story was having the story break down, or not work more than once. We adapted and persevered until we accomplished creating the story.

    I hope next year you create another story like this with your new third grade class!

    Sincerely,
    Rexon

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    1. @ Rexon,

      Wow! Fabulous comment! You are definitely ready for fourth grade writing! I like how you included your favorite parts of the story and gave specific examples. I thought everyone did a wonderful job with their parts. Each reader was so fluent and expressive.


      Your reflection about the part that was difficult was good too. I agree, the story did break down many times, but we persevered and did not accept failure. Writing can be difficult at times, but as you can clearly see, it's worth the struggle!

      I'll use Bad News Bev to motivate my third graders next year. Who knows, maybe Bev and Panda will have more adventures!

      Your teacher,
      Mrs. Y♥llis

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  4. Dear Mrs Yollis and class,

    What an amazing story! 4KM and 4KJ could not stop laughing and smiling while we watched your video. The story was extremely entertaining and humorous.

    The five parts of the story that we most enjoyed were
    - The juicy language and alliterations you used.
    - The expressive reading and sound effects.
    - Beverly’s lack of commenting skills.
    - The name choices – especially Bianca, Alma and Ross!
    - The clever ending where Panda revealed his identity.

    We were wondering how Beverly’s commenting skills are coming along now?

    Your blogging buddies from down under,
    4KM and 4KJ

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  5. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

    I really enjoyed recording the script of "Bad News Bev" because I have never done anything like this before, and I always like to try new things.

    The alliteration in the story was very clever. I think that it goes very well with the story. Making this story also helped me realize how hard it must be to make a movie. At the end of this project, I was very happy that I raised my hand to have a part in the script.

    Did you enjoy recording, editing, and proofreading the project?

    Sincerely,
    Alexandra

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  6. Dear Mrs Yollis and class,

    Bravo! I just loved your story. Your story was filled with wonderful twist and turns which makes for a good bear read. I loved your tones and expressions that each and everyone of you used. I felt it made your story really come to life.

    I loved all the different characters which were in the story especially "Alma." :)

    I also loved all the elements to your story because it took you on a different path every time which makes for an awesome read.

    Well done everyone from a very happy bear reader!

    AA

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  7. Dear Mrs. Yollis and class,

    Logan's grandmother and I just finished listening to your collaboritive story and we were both beary impressed. You did a great job of reading the story with expression and enthusiasm.

    Bravo!

    Sincerely,

    Logan's Mom & Mama

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  8. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

    Although it had a lot of editing, the video turned out great. I hope you can do it with the new third graders next year.

    Some things that I liked about the video are:

    • The amazing alliteration
    • The [click] sound effects. [bang]
    • Beverly's bad comment.

    Since my dad is a TV show writer, I showed him the video. He said it was cute and hilarious.

    Sincerely,
    Royce

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  9. Dear Mrs. Yollis and Class,

    When I heard you had made an audio book of a scary story, I thought I might need a teddy bear nearby in case I was scared but, as I read, I decided a teddy bear might be too much like Bev. Your story is brilliant!

    What do you think of our story?

    I was fascinated as I listened and read along with the story. The scariest part for me would have been receiving a comment that made no sense. I would probably spend much time trying to work out what had gone wrong with my computer or wondered if the comment had been written in a language my computer didn't understand. I don't think my computer can read bear. :)

    What elements did you enjoy the most?

    I liked the idea the giant Bev wanted to learn how to blog. Could you imagine the stories she might be able to tell from the bear's perspective?
    In her version, the mean and nasty Goldilocks would have broken into their house, stole their food, broke their chairs and slept in their beds, a real case for the policebears to solve.

    I also enjoyed your sound effects. The correct sound at the correct time can make the difference in a production. Imagine a movie meant to be very scary yet the sound people made a bad choice and added the song, "Barbie Girl".

    What was the hardest part about writing creating this story?

    A number of years back I did work on something like this with a class. I think the class found the recording of sound hardest because we had to make a number of takes before we had what we wanted.In the end, they loved the production but I no longer have a copy as it was nearly 30 years ago.

    I must say your story sounded brilliant. :)

    Keep on blogging. You posts are always interesting.

    @RossMannell
    Teacher, NSW, Australia

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  10. Dear Mrs Yollis and students,

    I just enjoyed listening to your story it was very funny and outstanding. The effects were awesome. Thank you so much for including me and AA it was really kind of you to do that.

    The elements were amazing.

    I wanted to listen to the story over and over again.

    From your happy pal

    Bianca

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  11. Dana (Sammy's mom)June 9, 2012 at 2:30 PM

    Dear Mrs. Yollis and class,

    WOW! What a story! I thoroughly enjoyed hearing all of the students narrate "Bad News Bev." My favorite part was when Bev got really hungry and you were able to capture a picture of her about to eat a laptop. She's a beary naughty bear! Keep up the good work.

    Dana (Sammy's mom)

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  12. Dear Mrs. Yollis and class,

    You guys are an impressive bunch! I am amazed at how such bright young minds were able to collaborate all of their talents in creating this entertaining video. What a wonderful way to end the school year. Thank you so much Mrs. Yollis for your never-ending passion and drive to instill the love of learning in our children.

    forever grateful,
    Moshi (Acacia's mom)

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  13. Dear Mrs Yollis
    We seen you used onomatopoeia in 'Bad News Bev'. We're leaning to use onomatopoeia in our writing like Moo,Boo Tick-Tock,Meow,Hoo,Boom,Rattle,buzz,tap,bash.

    I really enjoyed the movie you made. I liked Beverley's character because she was being fierce.

    sincerely
    T♥la

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  14. Dear Mrs Yollis

    Your impressive class made a wonderful story and I like the end because Super Panda was Beverley’s dad.
    Your class is wonderful.
    
by Matthew

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