Tuesday, November 10, 2009

Writers in Progress!

Over the last few months, Mrs. Yollis' class has been learning how to write a quality paragraph.

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It is important to brainstorm the
main ideas
of the topic before writing the paragraph.

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    Here is Gal's brainstorming.
    She has two main ideas and several details.

    Next, we wrote a rough draft using our brainstorming ideas.
    Notice Anais'




    Next, students used dictionaries to help them spell the high-level vocabulary words and adjectives they were including in their paragraph.

    Finally, the students proofread. Every writer carefully touched each word to make sure that each sentence was correctly written.
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    The paragraphs were scored on a 20 point rubric!

    Learning to write a quality paragraph is a lot of work, but well worth the effort!
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    What was the most difficult part for you?
    What writing skill did you learn or improve today?
    Share a compound sentence you produced in your paragraph!


    1. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

      What I learned is to touch each and every word on a paragraph. In addition, I also learned to use a dictionary to spell high vocabulary.

      Your student,

    2. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

      What I leaned is to use a dictionary to spell high vocabulary. I enjoyed doing my first comment on your blog and will contribute more to blogs now.:-)

      Sams brother,

    3. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

      What I leaned is to use a dictionary to spell high-level vocabulary. I enjoyed doing my first comment on your blog and will contribute more to blogs now. :-)

      Sam's sister,

    4. Dear Mrs Yollis,

      I love all of your paragraphs. I think they were interesting. I loved
      Scarlet's paragraph. I think your class is very good at blogging.

      From Mrs Ranneys class

      Natalie Del Carmen

    5. Dear Mrs.Yollis,

      My class is rewriting our "I'm Thankful" paragraphs because we made a lot of mistakes. The mistakes were mostly details and topic sentences. We're learning how to correct our mistakes!


      P.S. I'm in Mrs. Ranney's class

    6. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

      What we both learned is to always add magnificent adjictives and strong verbs.

      Sam and Julia

    7. Dear Mrs. Yollis

      When I got my paragraph back I just looked at it like I have never seen anything in my life. I was really shocked because I just realized that I didn't write a title or a closing sentence.

      Your student,

    8. @Sam and Julia,
      Thanks so much for leaving such great comments! Yes, a dictionary is an important tool for good writers! Looking forward to more wonderful comments from both of you!

      I'm glad you left a comment for us! I notice that your class is full of great bloggers, too!

      Thanks for such an honest comment. I think many people were surprised that they left parts out of their paragraphs. It was the first time everyone wrote a paragraph without any help from me. It's tough at first, but I think the class learned a lot from the experience.

      Looking forward to reading your blog!

      Mrs. Yollis

    9. Hello, Mrs Yollis and Class,

      We really like your ideas for writing quality paragraphs! As we are always looking for new ideas to improve our writing, we will be trying this out with our "Turkey Party" unit. Stay tuned to our blog for updates!

      :) Mrs. Benjamin and Class

    10. Dear Mrs. Yollis,

      It was really hard writing about what we were thankful for. In first grade at my old school had to write what I liked I did almost the same thing for the star test. It was so hard.

      If you were still in third grade would you do this?

      Your student and friend,

    11. Hi Ben,

      I like your collection of hockey cards because of all of the different teams and players you have!

      I like watching hockey on TV. I used to go to my cousin's games. My favorite team is the Boston Bruins. It's cool how the players glide on the ice and can pass to their teammates so quickly.

      Your friend,

      Rachel H.

    12. Dear Mrs.Yollis,

      I wish you a happy Thanksgiving.I loved your video about Thanksgiving.Please write back.

      Sams sis,

    13. Dear Julia,

      Thank you for leaving a nice comment! You have become an excellent blogger who always leaves a wonderful message! I hope you have a wonderful Thanksgiving, too!

      Your friend,
      Mrs. Yollis


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    Getting feedback is important to our writers. Let us know what you liked or what you learned.

    Steps to Comment:

    1. Write your comment in the box below. Be sure that you have proofread it for spelling, grammar, punctuation, and capitalization. Students should have a parent check it!

    2. Choose an identity. (If you have a gmail account, use it. If not, choose name/url. You can leave the url blank if you do not have a blog.)

    3. Click "Publish your Comment". You may preview your comment before publishing if you'd like.

    Important: All comments MUST be approved by me.
    :-) Mrs. Yollis